We were learning how to make writing more interesting by adding smileys and objects we do this by writing the story in a bow and then we go on the second box witch is attempt 2 we make it better 5 times and the firth one is the best.The words that are highlighted in blue are adjectives and the words in green are my favourite sentience words.
Attempt 1:
I put the chocolate on piece of paper I could not wait to eat it .It felt as soft as a bubble as I was holding it.I saw the chocolate staring at me and wanting me to eat it.I smelled a chocolate happy place it was so tempting to eat it.As I put it in my mouth I wanted more and more.When it poped in my mouth my tongue got coved in chocolate as melted away down my throat.
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Attempt 2:
I put the wondrous chocolate on my piece of paper I started to drool I couldn't wait to eat it. It felt like a round chocolate bubble as it melted in my hand.I saw the chocolate teasing me it was so tempting to eat it.When I smelled it I smelled a choc wondrous place could not wait anymore so I slid it in my mouth .When it was in my mouth my tongue go covered in delicious chocolate as It melted away.
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Attempt 3:I put the terrific chocolate on my piece of paper I started to drool I couldn't wait to nibble it. It felt like a round chocolate bubble as it started to feel squishy as it metaled.I saw the chocolate was mocking me me it was so tempting to eat it.When I smelled it I smelled a choco wondrous place could not wait anymore so I slid it in my mouth .When it was in my mouth my tongue go covered in delicious chocolate as It melted away.
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Attempt 4:I put the remarkable chocolate on my piece of paper I started to drool I couldn't wait to have a marvelous piece of chocolate. It felt like a round chocolate bubble as it started to feel gowy as it mealed.I saw the chocolate it was mocking me me it was so tempting to eat it.When I smelled it I smelled like best thing in the world I could not wait anymore so I slid it in my mouth .When it was in my mouth my tongue go covered in remarkable chocolate as It melted away.
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Attempt 5:I put the sensational chocolate on my piece of paper even though I did not want to I started to drool I couldn't wait to have a sensational piece of chocolate. It felt like a round chocolate bubble as it started to feel gowy as it metaled. I.I saw the chocolate it was mocking me me it was so tempting to eat it.When I smelled it I smelled like best thing in the world I could not wait anymore so I slid it in my mouth .When it was in my mouth my tongue go covered in remarkable chocolate as It melted away.
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