My Choclate Writing

We were learning how to make writing more interesting by adding smileys and objects we do this by writing the story in a bow and then we go on the second box witch is attempt 2 we make it better 5 times and the firth one is the best.The words that are highlighted in blue are adjectives and the words in green are my favourite sentience words.

Attempt 1: I put the chocolate on piece of paper I could not wait to eat it .It felt as soft as a bubble as I was holding it.I saw the chocolate staring at me and wanting me to eat it.I smelled a chocolate happy place it was so tempting to eat it.As I put it in my mouth I wanted more and more.When it poped in my mouth my tongue got coved in chocolate as melted away down my throat.

Attempt 2: I put the wondrous chocolate on my piece of paper I started to drool I couldn't wait to eat it. It felt like a round chocolate bubble as it melted in my hand.I saw the chocolate teasing me it was so tempting to eat it.When I smelled it I smelled a choc wondrous  place could not wait anymore so I slid it in my mouth .When it was in my mouth my tongue go covered in delicious chocolate as It melted away.

Attempt 3:I put the terrific chocolate on my piece of paper I started to drool I couldn't wait to  nibble it. It felt like a round chocolate bubble as it started to feel squishy as it metaled.I saw the chocolate was mocking me me it was so tempting to eat it.When I smelled it I smelled a choco wondrous  place could not wait anymore so I slid it in my mouth .When it was in my mouth my tongue go covered in delicious chocolate as It melted away.

Attempt 4:I put the remarkable chocolate on my piece of paper I started to drool I couldn't wait to  have a marvelous piece of chocolate. It felt like a round chocolate bubble  as it started to feel gowy as  it mealed.I saw the chocolate it was mocking me me it was so tempting to eat it.When I smelled it I smelled like best thing in the world I could not wait anymore so I slid it in my mouth .When it was in my mouth my tongue go covered in remarkable chocolate as It melted away.

Attempt 5:I put the sensational chocolate on my piece of paper even though I did not want to  I started to drool I couldn't wait to  have a sensational piece of chocolate. It felt like a round chocolate bubble  as it started to feel gowy as  it metaled. I.I saw the chocolate it was mocking me me it was so tempting to eat it.When I smelled it I smelled like best thing in the world I could not wait anymore so I slid it in my mouth .When it was in my mouth my tongue go covered in remarkable chocolate as It melted away.

Autumn Writing

We have been learning to make are writing more interesting.To do this we re-crafting are writing by using a describe map a describe map help us plan are Ides in better ways are topic was Autumn writing.Each time we wrought a paragraph we added adjectives and smileys.The yellow words that are highlighted in yellow are adjectives and The words highlighted in pink are smileys and green is my favorite sentence.So we can see are writing get better.My favorite thing about writing like this is I like to make my writing better and better.

1.Autumn is a cool season. In Autumn it starts to get colder because winter is coming.You start to put the fire on because the sun is not shinning .The night gets longer because the sun goes to sleep earlier. The leaves change couler because there is know sun to shine.The leaves start to fall because they are dieing .dieing. You start to have a leaf fight because the leaves are all over the ground.

2. Autumn is a beautiful season. In Autumn it starts to get icey cold because the snowy winter is coming.You start to put the fire to keep toasty because the sun is know longer there to keep us warm. The  nights go longer because daylight saving are near. The leaves change to a magical color because the bright warm sun is not there. The magical leaves start to fall because they are fading away. In Autumn it's a great Idea to have a leaf fight because wonderful colorful leaves are everywhere.

3. Autumn is a wonderful season.In Autumn it start to feel like your in an Ice block because The sowy winter is coming.You put the fire on to keep toasty warm like a oven  the warm sun is not there to shine. The nights get longer because daylight saving is just about hear.The leaves change to a magical colorful color because the bright shiny yellow sun is not shining.The beautiful wonderful leaves start to fall because they are slowly fading away. In Autumn it is the best idea to have a leaf fight because the wonderful color leaves are everywhere.

4. Autumn is a amazing beautiful  season. In Autumn it start to feel like you are in a fridge because the snowy winter is just around the corner .You put the fire on to keep lukewarm like you're in the sun. The nights get longer because daylight saving is coming.The leaves change different color like a rainbow  because the bright shiny yellow sun is not shining.The beautiful wonderful leaves start to fall because they are slowly fading away in the snowy winter. In Autumn it is a wonderful  idea to have a leaf fight because the rainbow color leaves are everywhere.

5. Autumn is a amazing beautiful  season. In Autumn it start to feel as cold as a snowy tondo  is just around the corner .You put the fire on to keep lukewarm like you're in the sun. The nights get longer and darker earlier because icey snowy winter is coming.The leaves change different color like a rainbow  because the bright shiny yellow sun is not shining.The beautiful wonderful leaves start to fall because they are slowly fading away in the snowy winter. In Autumn it is a wonderful  idea to have a leaf fight because the crunching crispy leaves are everywhere.